RASPUTIN: LEGENG THE UGLY MONKEY
Once upon a time a monkey so so ugly, your name was rasputin, it lived in the deep of brazil's jungle. Your look was rude, big eyes, broa back crouked legs and fat finger, in your head had a comb that he was yellow. Rasputin was a monkey shy but some time was crazy. In your habitat he had many problems the other crazy saw him, they scared, they laugh, they cry; shout and they maked bullying.
One day, he was tired so many joked, he wishes with all heart he can go away, also the ugly monkey had collect many postcards the places that the travellers leave in the jungles path. To that this afternoon the monkey postman to arrive and he leave a letter to Rasputin like surprise was your unck Panchito. He opened it was surprise he has a invitation the manhattan circus in the united states, he bancing and happy said.
- I going to go from this place, I don't want to see you anymore- with his thunder voice.
Reparing a small case, the ugly mokey get out eating and running to the freeway. a small red bus stoped and he get inside to the bus, but he doesn't see the bus rute.
Time away and the monkey get sleep a lot of hours. When the driver makes that he woke up, Rasputin get out from the bus. Around from Rasputin there was just jungle, he asked to the bus driver.
- Where am I? is this manhattan?
And the bus driver said.
- Not, you are in Mattangha .
And the bus keep you away. Rasputin doesn't have money, he was so sad.
He was lost in the jungle, without return to this home.
This story belongs to Juan david lopez
ReplyDeleteMistakes : Correction
ReplyDelete"Your look was rude" - " ITS look was rude"
"In your head" " in its head "
"Unck" "Uncle"
"Mockey" "Monkey"
"Bancing" "Dancing"
"In your head" - In its head
Delete" Legeng " - Legend
"Reparing" - Repairing
"the ugly mokey- The ugly monkey ( sometimes you omit the letters , be Careful with that )
Last tip:
Lopez don't change the words :3
legeng but is legend
ReplyDeletebroa but is broad
fat finger but is both fingers are fat
had but is has
bancing but is dancing
ReplyDeletecorrection:
broa -----> broad
Lopecitos remember that you are talking about an animal so you always write "its ", mistake (your name).
ReplyDelete"Your look was rude"---- "its appearance was rude"
they scared ---- they scared him
they cry--- they made him cried
be careful with the way that you write the words
Juan keep in mind the words of writing mistakes. how are you: broa, unck, crouked (Crooked), bancing think with this word you mean (Daicing).
ReplyDeleteBe careful when writing words that are repeated in the story wrong as Mokey.
Lopezongo good to be a sad end.